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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language, because some students don’t have a natural ability for languages. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
Nowadays,
Communicate
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 between nations is much
easiler
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easier
 than it was in the
previuos
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previous
. People can contact
foreigner
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foreigners
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 by using social media and travelling to other countries ,
beside
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 that people in countries will have
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to talk with people from
aboards
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boards
aboard
.
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,
study
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studying
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the news
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news
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new
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language
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 is significant as
this
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 reason cause some school
force
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to force
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student
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students
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 to
learning
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learn
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others
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other
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 languages.
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,
i
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I
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 disagree with
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 statement students should have
right
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the right
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 to choose
subject
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the subject
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 that they would
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 learn.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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force
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forcing
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student
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students
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 to learn a foreign
language
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 can make
learner
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learners
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 hate
that languages
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that language
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. What did you feel when you have to do things that you do not like to do? Do you feel nervous?
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 how
that
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those children felt. Lack of
language
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is not matter
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does not matter
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 because not every
careers
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career
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 need
this
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 skill.
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, if you are
artist
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an artist
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, you use only art skills and
draw
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drawing
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 skills.
Body paragraph 2
However
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, If you have to talk with
foreigner
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a foreigner
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,
language
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 skill is needed but
this
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 problem can be
solven
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solved
 by using
guide
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a guide
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 or translator device.
Conclusion
In addition
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,
School
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Schools
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 should make
foreign
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the foreign
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language
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languages
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as
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apply
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alternative subjects or special
club
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clubs
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. Teachers have to suggest kids
to
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join a course or a group.

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