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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005
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The following graph illustrates data about
car
 possession from 1975 to 2005 in
UK
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the UK
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. As we can see in the
chart-the
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chart the
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 percentage of
people
 who have 1
car
 always exceeds the other indicators, from 1975 even to 2005 years. 
However
, next after the owners of 1
car
, goes
people
 without their own vehicles and transports.And the lowest number of
people
 have 3
cars
, the percentage shows that it is slightly less than
rate
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the rate
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 of the owners of 2
cars
. When it comes to the past, we notice that almost all indicators have increased, except for one:”no
car
”. That information shows us that the economy and the production of machines
as well as
 the situation of
people
 is developing every year.Like, the number of
people
 without a
car
 was about
to
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45% in 1975 and in 2005 that number decreased almost twice.We
also
 see that in 1985 there were more owners of 2-3
cars
 than before, and
conversely
 , the percentage of
people
 who owned 1 or no
cars
 at all decreased.
To sum up
, in the beginning, there were problems with
the
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the ownership of the car
the car's ownership
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cars
 ownership, but now it is very developed,and I hope that in the future that part of our economy will only grow.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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