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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart indicates city dwellers'
coffee
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 and
tea
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 buying and drinking habits in specific Australian cities. Information is shown for five cities ; Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart. Looking at the
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that different figures are shown about people's
coffee
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 and
tea
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consuming
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consumption
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 habits. In each city, the largest proportion of residents went to a cafe to drink
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 four-week except for the dwellers living in
Adelaide
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. In Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, over 60% of residents went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks,
while
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 only under 50% of people living in
Adelaide
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 visited the space for the same purpose.
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, in
Adelaide
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, the percentage of dwellers who bought instant
coffee
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 was almost the same as the rate of them going to a cafe in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks. Meanwhile, in all cities, the ratio of people buying fresh
coffee
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks was the lowest, and especially in Brisbane, the figure of residents who bought fresh
coffee
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 was quite smaller than
other
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in other
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 regions in Australia.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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