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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information about the
rate
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 of six segments in energy used by fuel in the United States over a
period
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 of 50 years from 1980 to 2030.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most of energy consumption in the USA is petrol and oil, and the
rate
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 of coal and natural gas have increased gradually since 1980 to
projection
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 until 2023.
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, three types of fuels (nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower) have risen slightly between 1980 and 2030. From 1980, the line graph illustrates the highest
rate
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 of fuel usage in the USA is petrol and oil at 35 Quadrillion units and it had a dramatic growth at approximately 50
q
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, since 1980 to
projection
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 until 2030.
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, at the beginning of the
period
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 time in coal use experienced a slight rise at around 17
q
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, it had kept marginal growth and it will reach a peak at about 32
q
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 in 2030. In comparison with the
rate
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 of natural gas, from 1980 to 2030, the
rate
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 of natural gas was higher than the former just under a quarter from the beginning of the
period
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 but after ,that it was erratic fluctuation and remained constantly in the
projection
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period
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 shown at about 25
q
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 from 2015 to 2030. In terms of the quantities of fuel usage including nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower, they stood at the same
rate
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 at around 4
q
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 .
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, they remained constant at around 8
q
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, 6
q
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,and 4
q
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 respectively
at the end
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 of the
period
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 time
projection
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, period, projection, q with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • trends
  • marked increase
  • dominant source
  • modest increase
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • nuclear energy
  • noticeable decline
  • span
  • petroleum
  • natural gas
  • coal
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