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If you have a chance to gab year what would you do?

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 year of high school was a time for students to make decisions for their future. Some of them decided to enter college, but for me was different, I decided to take a gap year because I want to find myself by doing a new thing and I think it is a way to develop myself and my skills before taking the next step in my future education or career. After I decided to gap year, I find an English course for
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 abroad that can study, work and travel at the same time. I think it is a way to make money, get skills that can not learn in a classroom and can
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 experience other cultures as well.
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, I prepared the document for the program that I applied for.
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 first week of being there was a very hard time for me, everything there was a new experience. I have to acclimate to the society, food, and weather there. It is not my native language so, it is hard for me to communicate with other.
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, being all right continually on the third week, everything is easier than before, I get used to the food, weather and communication with people there. I was so happy with my life there, I reached a lot of interesting experiences there and
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 my communication skill improved. After I came back,I found out what I
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 to learn and what program
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I want to apply
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 college.
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 experience made me learn a lot of
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 and have more confidence to speak English. If I have more chances I will find a program to work and travel again for sure.
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