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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.
#information #car #ownership #uk
The line graph illustrates information concerning car ownership in percentages, between 1975 and 2005 in the United
kingdom
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. From an overview perspective, it is seen that the majority of the population had a car
while
 the minority had 3
a
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cars
 over the
the
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years. To start with, The number of people who had 3
cars
 and above stood at
aproximately
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approximately
 3% in 1975. It steadily rose over years and ended up at 9% in the
year
 2005.
On the other hand
, the number of people who had two
cars
 was
at
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6% in the
year
 1975 and it increased slowly
by
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 each
year
 that passed by and ended
off
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at 9% in the
year
 2005. In 1975, it is seen that approximately about 47% of the United kingdom population, had no
cars
.
However
 as time went by, the figures dramatically dropped to about 25% in 1985 and
it
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 started decreasing steadily
untill
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until
it
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 ended up at 22% in the
year
 2005.
In contrast
, the figure for UK residents who had a single car remained high. It was at 45% in the
year
 1975
then
 it decreased to about 38% in the
year
 1985. From there
is
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it
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 started increasing and ended
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at the same figure as it was in the
year
 1975.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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