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-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#-do #help #technology #students #information #support
Nowadays
technologies
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more
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is more
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develop
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 than it was in the past. It
seen
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 to be considered that it is
a
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the
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 best
tools
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tool
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 for
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the student
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student
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students
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 to learn more information and improve their knowledge. I agree with
this
 statement and
reasons
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 will be explained in the essay.
Firstly
,
search
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the search
a search
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engine
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engines
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 can help the learner find unknown data and
it
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apply
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not limit the time. In the
case
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,case
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 that
student
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students
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 have
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an issue
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issue
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issues
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 with their homework and they could not ask their teacher because it
not
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is not
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in
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during
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 office hours. So, they can
use
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a search
the search
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engine
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engines
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 to find the answer. From my view as a senior programmer,
sometime
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sometimes
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 I found an error in my code and I do not know how to solve it.
Therefore
, I
use
 google to find
for
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some solution, it
give
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 me
answer
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an answer
the answer
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 or
sometime
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some time
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 it
give
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gives
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 me an idea to fix the problem
which
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apply
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faster
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is faster
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 than using books.
Secondly
,
internet
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the internet
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contain
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contains
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large
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a large
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 amount of
practise
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practice
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,
student
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the student
a student
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 can
use
 it to improve
thier
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their
 skill and it
also
enhance
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enhances
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 their knowledge.
However
, It can
be
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be used
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use
 for
chetting
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chatting
 as the case in the famous AI
programing
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programming
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 in
this
 period which is ChatGPI, some people
use
 it for writing
the
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apply
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content and making
thesis
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a thesis
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. Some people
use
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who use
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 it
have
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has
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wrote
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written
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a
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short story and
sell
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 it to book
shop
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shops
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.
Moreover
, Some
teenager
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teenagers
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use
 ChatGPI
doing
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to do
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thier
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their
 homework, it might affect their cleverness, they might be failed
exam
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exams
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 because they
be
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are
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 able to
done
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do
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 it by
thierself
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their self
herself
 because they always
use
 AI
for
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to
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 find
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the answer
an answer
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answer
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answers
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. In conclusion, it can be good or bad for children which
depend
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depends
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 on
ways
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the ways
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 that they
use
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ituse
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.
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