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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.
#information #car #ownership #uk
This
 line chart depicts how
much
Correct quantifier usage
many
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cars
people
owns
Change the verb form
own
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 in the UK between 1975 to 2005.It
clear
Add a missing verb
is clear
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that
Correct word choice
apply
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from the graph
that is
 the local in 1975
Correct article usage
the propotion
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propotion
Correct your spelling
proportion
 of
people
Correct pronoun usage
who dont
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dont
Correct your spelling
don't
 have
car
Correct article usage
a car
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rise
Wrong verb form
rose
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 to 45
cars
,
while
 either
people
Fix the agreement mistake
person
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owns
Correct pronoun usage
who owns
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 one
car
Correct article usage
the propotion
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propotion
Correct your spelling
proportion
 fall to 35
cars
 in 1985.
according to
 what is shown between 1995 to 2005
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the propotion
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propotion
Correct your spelling
proportion
 of
people
own
Wrong verb form
owning
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 one
car
dramactily
Correct your spelling
dramatic
 to 50
cars
.
However
Add a comma
,However
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 we can see
people
owns
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own
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 two
car
 climb to 20
cars
 in 2005.
To sum up
 , we could say
that is
 good when
people
 in 1975 has
less
Correct quantifier usage
fewer
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 than
cars
 in 2005 and between 1975 to 2005
people
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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cars
Correct quantifier usage
number of cars
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, people, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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