Some say the purpose of education is prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say the purpose of education is help people achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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that schooling is prepare individuals to be useful to

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the goal of learning is to enhance

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achieve personal ambitions. A lot of

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; some agree that schooling brings benefits to

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, the life of citizens is getting worse day by day and a lot of different issues are getting bigger than we think.

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learning in the university is the way to go both where we reach and what we have to do.

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of education makes us so confident and motivated. It

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idea that schooling is useful to our

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. Nobody can do tasks without their education. The more we study, the nicer

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.5

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Topic Vocabulary:

contribute to society
workforce
empower
fulfill potential
social responsibility
individual growth
well-rounded approach
societal impact
personal development
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Some say the purpose of education is prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say the purpose of education is help people achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

Fully explain your ideas

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