Some say the purpose of education is prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say the purpose of education is help people achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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people
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that schooling is prepare individuals to be useful to
society
. Another
think
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that
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the goal of learning is to enhance
people
achieve personal ambitions. A lot of
people
see that goal of learning is to enhance
people
achieve their
goal
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,
however
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; some agree that schooling brings benefits to
society
. If there aren’t any educated
people
, the life of citizens is getting worse day by day and a lot of different issues are getting bigger than we think.
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the
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learning in the university is the way to go both where we reach and what we have to do.
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,
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of education makes us so confident and motivated. It
is
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not only
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our life quality but
also
bring
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desire
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which we would like to do some things. Recently, Education is
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significant key to
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our goals. In my point of view, Both ideas are acceptable,
however
, the mostly
agree
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idea is
first
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idea that schooling is useful to our
society
. Nobody can do tasks without their education. The more we study, the nicer
society
gets. So, We, all humans have to study if we have much time and money that can afford
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  • contribute to society
  • workforce
  • empower
  • fulfill potential
  • social responsibility
  • individual growth
  • well-rounded approach
  • societal impact
  • personal development
  • career prospects
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