Some say the purpose of education is prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say the purpose of education is help people achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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that schooling is prepare individuals to be useful to

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the goal of learning is to enhance

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; some agree that schooling brings benefits to

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learning in the university is the way to go both where we reach and what we have to do.

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of education makes us so confident and motivated. It

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which we would like to do some things. Recently, Education is

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our goals. In my point of view, Both ideas are acceptable,

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idea that schooling is useful to our

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.5

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Topic Vocabulary:

contribute to society
workforce
empower
fulfill potential
social responsibility
individual growth
well-rounded approach
societal impact
personal development
career prospects

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Some say the purpose of education is prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say the purpose of education is help people achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

Fully explain your ideas

Obesity is now a major global epidemic. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?

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