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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.

#information #car #ownership #uk
A glance at the chart provided reveals some details about
car
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the car
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 ownership percentage between 1975 and 2005 in
UK
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the UK
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.One particular point that
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is highlighted
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 by
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the figure
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 is that during
these year
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 the proportion of
people
 with no
car
 had
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considerably
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decline
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declined
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. As it is clear,the percentage of
people
 who had more than one
car
 during
this
 period had a
marginally
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incresed
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increased
.The percentage of
people
 with 2 cars
had
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rose
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 from 7% to 18% during these years.and the proportion of
people
 with 3cars had some striking similarities with
people
 with 2 cars,In1975 had a little rose
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from
 3percent to somewhere in the vicinity of
10percent
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10 percent
 in 2005.
According to
 the chart,the number of
people
 who had
not
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no
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car
 in 1975,had dramatically decreased
during
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 1975to 1985 and
then
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decade
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 had marginally decline and to just over than 20percent.
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 UK citizens with 1
car
 during
this
 period always
was fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 between
35percent
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35 percent
 and 45
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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