Computers are being used more and more in education. Some say that thus is a positive trend while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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widely claimed that
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number of computer users in
education
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system had been increasing to
this
day and age and it brings many positive results, some
people
argue that
this
trend is able to contribute
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negative outcomes in
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. My reason
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both views and personal
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will be elaborated in
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To begin
with, some
people
believe that
technology
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advancement
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a crucial role
for
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in
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an
education
system in many aspects because it is
convenience
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and accessible for
students
. Take an online course
for instance
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the Covid-19 pandemic caused many
students
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to study remotely from their
home
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, and
this
new compulsory action represented that
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globla
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global
education
is able to upgrade to the next level. In terms of teaching
technique
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techniques
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which
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easy to access from anywhere regardless
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where
students
live.
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,
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remotely not only decrease
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students'
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expenduture
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expenditure
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but
also
save their time to do more things
instead
of
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to school.
However
, some opponents argue that
computer
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era in our
education
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nowadays
affect
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their
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in
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because online learning can lead to less
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into
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the
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class and contribute
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pessimistic consequences in the long run.
For example
, gaining knowledge from the screen can lead to eyes problem when you spend most of
time
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on it, and
also
students
tend to have less society
interactive
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within the lecture.
Therefore
, it is sensible that why some
people
believe that
this
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about negative outcomes more
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benefits. Personally, I strongly believe that
digital
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age in
education
environments can be beneficial for them. In terms of
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technology
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devices make it easy to take
note
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notes
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or
presentation
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presentations
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for peers, and
also
reduce the amount of paper that use in classes and rarely to be
recyle
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recycled
recycle
. From
this
perspective, I agree that
people
can reap great benefits from
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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in
education
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the education
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system. In conclusion,
although
it is undeniable that technology can lead to negative consequences, I am of the opinion that there are more optimistic results
to
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our society and
students
.
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