Many psychologists recommend that the best way to relieve stress is to do nothing at all for a period of time during the day. Do you agree or disagree?

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because of many
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their
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. It may stimulate people
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stress
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easily.
Psychologist
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say that the most effective way relieving
stress
is to do nothing for a
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. I generally agree with that statement
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two reasons, the high blood pressure and less
oxygen
supply to the brain that may occur when people
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stress
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stressful condition because we can not think and do anything well. It may happen because of the
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of
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blood pressure
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that condition. The medical approach
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that
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doing nothing for a period of time for lowering that
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pressure
is a good idea. The more unwell condition, the less effective to do
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activity
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. Both scientists and yoga trainers opine that all
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need meditation especially to avoid being
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frustrated
. It may improve
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level
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human
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brain.
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oxygen
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a significant role
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human mentality, the lower
level
of it, the worse effect, and vice versa. Being stressed,
for instance
, is affected by the low
level
of
oxygen
.
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Meditation
is focusing on breathing without doing anything for
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several minutes
, both
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and
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. It was done by many
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started at the beginning of
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century, not only for realising
stress
but
also
for getting
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inspiration. I personally agree to do meditative activity when we feel bad rather than push
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hard. Making sure that our blood pressure is fine and our
oxygen
level
is enough is paramount to
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an
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job-effective person.
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