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The two map below show the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.

The two map below show the changes in town of Denham from 1986 to the present day.
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The maps indicate the changes that the development of the town of Denham between 1986 and now.
Overall
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, the farmlands have been removed and the gardens have been cut down. Especially, the number of
houses
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 has increased. In detail, one of the farmlands by the river stoke has been demolished and other farmland to the northwest of the map has been removed.
Such
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 areas were replaced by a lot of
houses
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.
Similarly
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, the size of gardens has been reduced, which has introduced footpaths and built
houses
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. Especially, the footpath in the middle of the present map was surrounded by
houses
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. Turning to other facilities, two shops have been demolished,
while
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 the post office and the bridge have remained unchanged since 1986. As the size of the gardens has been cut down, the large house has been redeveloped into
the
Correct article usage
a
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 retirement home. The primary school have been expanded.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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