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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table compares data concerning the number of
students
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 enrolled at the University of
Manchester
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 in 1937, 1967 and 2017, their gender distribution and their original region.
It is clear that
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 enrolment has increased considerably over the period shown, and the figure for
students
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 coming to
Manchester
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 from far afield has continued to rise. The proportion of female
students
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 has once fallen in 1967 but rose again in 2017,
however
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, male
students
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 show just the opposite tendency. In 1937, only 327
students
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 enrolled at
Manchester
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 University and the gender distribution was relatively balanced, with 45% female
students
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 and 55% male
students
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. Over time, the number of new
students
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 almost tripled in 1967 and reached 6,254 in 2017. In 1967, a fluctuation can be seen in the ratio of male to female
students
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, with 65% of new
students
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 being male, but in 2017 a decrease of 20% was seen .
While
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 55% of new
students
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 lived near
Manchester
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 in 1937,
this
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 percentage continued to decline, with only 1-2% of freshmen coming from a nearby region in 2017.
On the other hand
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,
in contrast
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 to the situation in 1937, more
students
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 came from other parts of the world. And the proportion of foreign
students
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 rose sharply in 2017, from 6% in 1937 to 32% in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, manchester with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • increase/decrease in student numbers
  • post-war baby boom
  • globalization
  • technological advancement
  • education accessibility
  • demographic changes
  • overseas students
  • gender representation in education
  • international reputation
  • higher education
  • university capacity
  • social factors
  • economic influences
  • political factors
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