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Some people think that people choose their job bases on income.to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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 some folks think that people should choose their
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 by whether they can get a high salary or not regardless of their well-being or satisfaction, others believe that passion is one of the important criteria when getting a
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.
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, will try to elaborate on reasons why I strongly agree with the latter's idea with some considerations,
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 I
also
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 understand the benefits of choosing a career with a high income. To commence with, certainly, it is true that in the world we live in today, money is definitely a powerful tool because the more money people get, the higher quality of
life
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 they can get.
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, communities all should choose their jobs with passion when it comes to a long-term perspective about their career
life
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, I suppose. It is mainly because higher
motivation
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 has positive effects on workers and companies.
For example
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, a
worker
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 who has a higher
motivation
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 to
work
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 is able to grow much more in his career and being passionate is directly linked to being productive.
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, a
worker
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 who has no
motivation
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 to
work
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 is more likely to be absent from
work
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, which is bad for the company's productivity and what is worse, it is easier to drop out. Second of all, an enjoyable
job
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 helps employees to be happy in terms of not only their physical aspects but
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 their mental aspects.
In other words
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, workers should select jobs with their passion or satisfaction because
work
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 occupies half of a
worker
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's
life
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.
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, it is better for employees to have no stress than have
work
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 stress.
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, it is better for them to feel enjoyable when working than not enjoyable.
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, doing something they enjoy waking up for in the morning can help them not only feel better but even get lost in the
work
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 if they are having problems in other areas of their lives.
To sum up
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, I strongly agree with the idea that communities should decide on a
job
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 with their
motivation
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 or enjoyment not money because of long-term perspectives about
worker
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's
life
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.
However
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, the side of income should be ignored and should be taken into consideration as well when they are making
such
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 an important decision.

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