The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables, sugars and sweets, and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
line chart depicts relative cost changes for fresh
fruits
,
vegetables
, sugar and
sweets
, and carbonated
drinks
from 1978 to 2009. It is clear from the graph that the fresh
fruits
and
vegetables
represented show rapidly soared during these years.
According to
what is shown, Fresh
fruits
and
vegetables
start at slightly over 50
then
had a modest dip
then
it was consistent between 1985 and 1989, After
that
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it was growing steadily until they reached
at
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almost 348 in 2009. Sugars and
sweets
, carbonated
drinks
, and consumer- price
index
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have approximately patterned
through out
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throughout
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the
caple
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of years. As we can see they start from the same level After that the rate of consumer-price index got significantly jumped to it reached over 200.
Also
, sugar and
sweets
take almost the same as consumer-price index, So it stops at exactly 200. ,
Also
we can see from the data that the carbonated
drinks
went fluctuated to reached
at
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slightly over 150.
To sum up
, We could say that fresh
fruits
and
vegetables
reached the highest price compared to sugar and
sweets
, and carbonated
drinks
from 1978 to 2009.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, vegetables, sweets, drinks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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