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Holding international games such as the olympic games is an exciting event. Some people think it has positive effects while others argue it is a waste of money. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Organizing international sports events
such
 as the Olympic games which are grant programs of
world
 festivity.
Although
, some people believe that, it is advantageous for the hosting country. Other people opine
this
 is a waste of money.
This
 essay will discuss both views and explain the argument for global sports with an excellent conclusion.
It is clear that
 playing the intercontinental game is very fascinating for every sports lover all over the
world
. when
this
 hosting country is arranging
this
 plan for foreign tourists and athletes they believe that
this
 event will achieve a lot of foreign currency and
this
 country's government will take some initiative for developing transport, roads, food and hotel facilities. It is
also
 a prestigious issue in front of the global monitor.
For example
,
last
 year Qatar arranged the Football
world
 cup tournament and they were hosting
this
 case. They have done very well and got a lot of advantages like
,
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 foreign bucks, exploring their own cultures and how to arrange the big event. On the other ,hand feel that
this
 is a waste of money for
such
 of function. they are spending a huge amount of money on temporary development and nonprofitable work. after finishing
this
 event need short of labour for dismantling
this
 arrangement. so it is a totally worthless activity in front of the basic requirement of general people.
To conclude
,
this
 end of all calculations we can say that,
this
 is an effective and needful activity in our whole
world
 for creating a healthy and wealthy environment which are giving refreshing mentality for every part of the sector.
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