The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

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The table illustrates the percentages of students studying at four different secondary

schools

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from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that

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the community

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experienced a significant increase in the proportion of school children attending their institutions over the period, the others encountered a corresponding decline. In detail, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled

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decreased noticeably from slightly over half to well over one-third in 2005 and eventually one-fifth in 2009.

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nearly one-quarter of the pupils attended grammar

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in 2000, the proportion dropped by half in nine years. Meanwhile, only a few

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of students went to specialist

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fell by 2

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during the same period.

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other types of

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declined the proportion of attending students, community

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were in the opposite trend. Even though just over one-fifth of children studied in these

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in 2000, the figure went up remarkably to over half of all pupils during the following nine years.

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

Every year large numbers of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of migration for the individual and for society as a whole.

It is common for each member of family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think this will lead them to break down of family relationships and communication. To what extent do you agree?

Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.