The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

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The table illustrates the percentages of students studying at four different secondary

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from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that

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the community

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experienced a significant increase in the proportion of school children attending their institutions over the period, the others encountered a corresponding decline. In detail, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled

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decreased noticeably from slightly over half to well over one-third in 2005 and eventually one-fifth in 2009.

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nearly one-quarter of the pupils attended grammar

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in 2000, the proportion dropped by half in nine years. Meanwhile, only a few

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of students went to specialist

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fell by 2

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during the same period.

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while

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other types of

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declined the proportion of attending students, community

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were in the opposite trend. Even though just over one-fifth of children studied in these

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in 2000, the figure went up remarkably to over half of all pupils during the following nine years.

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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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In some countries, traditional leisure activities like dance, music, and sports are becoming less popular among young people. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays in many countries traditional customs are becoming less popular than in the past. Do you agree or disagree? What can parents and teachers do about this?