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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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Different countries have varying approaches to
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discipline
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.In my opinion, I believe the advantages of having
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 guiding the behaviour of
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 in terms of
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 and respect outweigh having freedom of character.
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, where there are no
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 and regulations there is no
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 thing as an offence. Ultimately, there are a number of things we ought to imbibe in
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 as they are growing up because they will play an important role in their lives when they become adults.
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 is one of the most important aspects of a
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’s upbringing, when a
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 is nurtured with very strict
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 it guides their
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.
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, when I was little, my parents scheduled my daily activities in
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 a way that I had time to play,read, eat and observe a siesta.
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,
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 helped me plan appropriately when I was fully matured. Another point to consider is how cultured and well-mannered
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 become when they’re not allowed to do as they please.
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, if a
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 was to break a dish whenever he or she was angry and there was a punishment for that, I believe he wouldn’t consider
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 actions again.
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,it makes a
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 think maturely from a tender age, they begin to understand right from wrong.proper upbringing makes
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 grow up to be responsible and well-behaved adults. In conclusion,
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 there are some disadvantages of adhering to strict
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, its numerous benefits
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 as
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 extending to every aspect of life and learning to respect young and old outweigh any of its demerits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upbringing
  • discipline
  • autonomy
  • safety
  • responsibility
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • independence
  • boundaries
  • rebellion
  • holistic development
  • structure
  • nurturing environment
  • behavioral expectations
  • social norms
  • authority
  • decision-making skills
  • consequences
  • respect
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