The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

#process #sugar #cane

THE PROVIDED DIAGRAM DISPLAYS THE GENERAL INFORMATION ABOUT THE PRODUCTION OF

SUGAR

FROM

SUGAR

CANE

OVERALL

, IT CAN BE SEEN THAT 7 DISTINCT STEPS ARE REQUIRED TO PRODUCE

SUGAR

. THE PROCESS IS INITIATED BY GROWING

SUGAR

CANE

IN YIELDS AND FINALISED WITH DRYING AND COOLING IN SPECIFIC TANKS. THE FIRST PHASE OF THE

SUGAR MAKING

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PROCESS IS CULTIVATING

SUGAR

CANE

IN FARMLANDS WHERE IT TAKES 12 TO 18 MONTHS TO BE GROWN MATURE.

THEREAFTER

, THE COLLECTION OF RIPE

CROP

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IS DONE BY TWO VARIOUS METHODS, EITHER BY SPECIAL

MACHINERIES

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MACHINERY

TYPES OF MACHINERY

PIECES OF MACHINERY

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THAT CAN ACCELERATE THE PROCESS OF HARVESTING

SUCH

AS COMBINERS OR BY

MAN POWER

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MANPOWER

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WITH PARTICULAR TOOLS AND EQUIPMENT.

SUBSEQUENTLY

, HARVESTED

SUGAR

CANE

IS READY TO BE CRUSHED BY MEANS OF

DEFINITE

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MECHANISM, WHERE THE JUICE IS EXTRACTED.

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, THE EXTRACTED JUICE IS PURIFIED FROM

REMAINS

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THE REMAINS

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SUGAR

CANE

THROUGH

LIMESTONE

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A LIMESTONE

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FILTER. IT IS FOLLOWED BY THE EVAPORATING APPROACH, WHERE THE FILTERED JUICE IS BOILED AT

CERTAIN

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A CERTAIN

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HEATING DEGREE IN ORDER TO OBTAIN THE SYRUP AND EVAPORATE THE REST. AFTERWARD, THE SYRUP IS PLACED INTO THE CENTRIFUGE WITH

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PURPOSE TO

SEPERATE

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SEPARATE

SUGAR

CRYSTALS FROM SYRUP , BY SPINNING RAPIDLY.

CONSEQUENTLY

SUGAR

CRYSTALS ARE LEFT TO BE DRIED AND COOLED IN DISTINCTIVE CONTAINERS FOR

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EXCEPTIONAL AMOUNT OF TIME.

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