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The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The scheme illustrates the
aluminum
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 recycling process. The diagram shows 7 steps
which
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used
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are used
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 for recycling.
Such
 as “used cans”, collection, cleaning, sorting, shredding and compressing, heating and melting, rolling, recycling and reusing. The first step represents used cans. The cans which were in
trash
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the trash
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, go to
collection
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the collection
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 by
garbage
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a garbage
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 truck. The third stage provides
following
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the following
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 actions: cleaning, sorting, shredding and compressing. First of all, cans are cleaned
from
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 dirt,
after
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and after
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 that sorted and crushed into pieces.
At
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 the
end
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 these pieces compressed. The next step shows heating and melting.
A
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little
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 pieces of cons
sent
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are sent
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 to heating and start to melt, achieving a liquid. After that, they get a roll
with
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2,5 mm-6mm thick.
On
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In
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 the
last
stages
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 it’s recycling and started reusing.
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