Counties with long working days are more successful economically, but there are some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Working hard can make a
person
financially stable . However
, some argue that working for a long time can have some negative impact on individuals and I also
agree that engaging in a job for long hours can definitely create some social problems in people
. But I also
believe that it helps them to fulfil their dreams .
On the one hand , working overtime can create some issues
in a
individual's physical and social Change the article
an
life
. We can see that ,
today most Remove the comma
apply
people
are working continuously for a long day , and they don't have the time to discuss problems in the
families or spend time with their loved ones because of it and Change the word
their
as a result
, they are having issues
with their families and friends , eventually , leading to big issues
like divorce and stress issues
. For example
, in metropolitan countries like The USA , stress issues
and divorce rates are much higher compared to other countries and the findings revealed that this
is mostly due to
work pressure between people
.
On the other hand
, having a successful economy can also
make a person
happier in life
and they can also
use the money to
leisure activities . It is obvious that everyone Change preposition
for
have
an ambition in their Change the verb form
has
life
, therefore
, working hard for that can help a individuals
to achieve that Correct the article-noun agreement
individuals
an individual
dream
and as a result
, they can be enjoy
their Change the verb form
enjoy
life
. For instance
, if a person
's dream
is to live in a mansion that the individuals dream
of then
he had to work day and night to achy that goal so that , they can be successful in their life
.
To conclude
, it is clear that
working overtime can have a serious effect on people
's social life
. But , I also
assume that working hard also
can a person
to
achieve his Fix the infinitive
apply
dream
and be successful.Submitted by varshajose345 on
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