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with an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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There are several keys towards business success.
However
, some people think that
product
 promotion and marketing skills have
a
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worth
to penetrate
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 a
product
 in
market
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the market
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 for a successful outcome. I partially agree with
this
 view as there are other components as well that needs to
be consider
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. Marketing and
product
 promotion
are
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an
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essential
department
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departments
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 of a
company
. If an organization have a lacking in their branding strategies,
this
 will eventually impact
on
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reputation and revenue loss.
This
 department prepares tactics to enhance adaptability by
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user
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users
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 and compete with other substitutes available in
market
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the market
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.
For instance
, Apple a renowned
company
has
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started their manufacturing plant
from
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 a small scale and
due to
 their focus on marketing strategies, they are now leading in mobile phones.
However
, there are some other keys as well towards a benefit of a
company
.
Price
 and
quality
 play a vital role towards
company
 profit.
Due to
high
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 inflation rate, clients in
market
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the market
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 have become
price conscious
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price-conscious
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 and they prefer
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a product
the product
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product
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products
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 with reasonable
price
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prices
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 and better
quality
. So, creating a
quality
product
with
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reasonable
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price
 is a challenge for a
company
 as compromise can lead to
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 impact on
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company
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 reputation and financial loss.
For instance
, Nokia Brand has captured 80%
market
 share
due to
 its robust technology and reasonable
price
 within a year.
Consequently
, these factors should be considered
while
 launching a
product
 in
market
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the market
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.
To conclude
,
Product
 marketing,
price
 and
quality
 have
the
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importance
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 for
the
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business development
due to
high
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 competition in
market
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the market
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. By taking certain
measure
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measures
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 and strategies, an organization can establish
a
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 desired profit.
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