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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line chart illustrates data about
water
consumption
 in the whole world for different purposes between 1900 and 2000, and the table shows data about population, irrigated land and
water
consumption
 per person in two different countries in the year 2000.
Overall
, the
water
consumption
 of agriculture, industrial and domestic use witnessed an upward trend over the century. Another point that should
also
 be highlighted is that
agriculture
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 sector was the most common purpose to use
water
 throughout the entire period.
In addition
, the figures in Brazil were more than in the Democratic Republic of
Congo
 in all
the
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three directions. Looking at the details,
water
 for the agriculture sector was used at around 500
km^
3 in the first year, after which the figure showed a gradual increase to the end of the period, reaching a peak of approximately 3000
km^
3 in the final year. The same
it
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can be seen in industrial and domestic sectors, where
consumption
 was at less than 1000
km^
3 in 1900, and
then
 was a significant rise over the whole period in
the
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question, hitting a peak of more than 1000
km^
3 and about 500
km^
3 respectively in 2000. Meanwhile, people in Brazil outnumber people in
Congo
 by around 170 million persons.
Moreover
,
according to
 the table, Brazil had more irrigated land than
Congo
 with 26500
km^
2 and 100
km^
2 in turn.
Besides
, the Brazilians used 359 m^3 a person of
water
, whilst individuals in
Congo
 consumed only 8 m^3 per person in 2000.
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