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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
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The three maps illustrate how the West
Park
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 Secondary
School
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 had been transformed from the beginning of the construction project in 1950 until 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
school
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 had increased in size during the period given and the car
park
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 was doubled in size
at the end
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 of the construction period.
However
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, the other areas had a slight change in different years. In 1950, the
school
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 was built opposite the main road and nearby the residential
area
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, which had the farmland located back to them.
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, there was a children’s play
area
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 that was built behind the
school
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. In the next 30 years, the playground remained the same but the
school
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 was expanded in a westerly direction to build a science block. Aside from the science block, there was a small car
park
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 which was built on land nearby previously occupied by houses.
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, the farmland was demolished and changed into a sports
field
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. In 2010, the
school
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 building remained unchanged but the car
park
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 was extended significantly more than double its original size by replacing the
area
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 of the sports
field
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. It can be seen that the sports
field
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 was moved into the playground
area
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, dividing the children's play
area
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 space in half to share the
area
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 with the
field
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, area, field with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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