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Nowdays, many people have to work long time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What employers can do to make their life easier?

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One of the main controversial issues in today's life is the long working
hours
 for employees which causes stress and worsening condition depression among them. Modernity might have a serious impact on the mentioned issue.
there
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 are some suggestions that may help
governer
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governments
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 or entrepreneurs to reduce working
hours
 and following that solve its consequences.
To begin
 with, the idea
of
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 new technology or modern life can make people's life easier was untrue.
Although
 automation is replaced within a variety of man-made majors to decrease human responsibilities and heavy
work
 traffic since company's
owner
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owners
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 are seeking their profits more than their workforce's satisfaction, it causes higher working
hours
 since handling some
machine
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machines
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demand
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demands
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 more crew
along with
 more concentration but because employers do not want more expenses
due to
 more
staff
 ,they forced their workforce to
work
 longer.
For instance
,giving services from some companies becomes 24/7 which needs rotating duty alongside more
hours
 to
work
.
While
 there are plenty of reasons which forced
staff
 for longer
hours
working
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, some solutions suggested improving their satisfaction.
For example
, paying money for extra
hours
 may be a good way to motivate people to
work
 happier if not possible to hire new
staff
 or awarding them some paid days off of
work
 as vacation
along with
 providing tickets and accommodation for spending the vacation in resort areas. In conclusion,
although
, employees who are working for longer
hours
due to
 modernity or shortage of workforce are in stressful conditions
due to
 lack of rest, corporates can inspire their
staff
 to perform their job with less stress by awarding them or giving chance to get their own leisure time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global competition
  • economic pressure
  • advancements in technology
  • blurred lines
  • disconnect
  • cost of living
  • cultural emphasis
  • exacerbating
  • flexible working conditions
  • mitigate
  • burnout
  • wellness programs
  • mental health support
  • stress management
  • job satisfaction
  • workload
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