Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific world, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, data transformation is speeding up around the globe
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the development of technology.
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some people believe that new
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and information in both business and academic careers should be transformed freely, some others think these
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should only be shared by paying its cost. Meanwhile, I stand with the second point of view. In
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essay, both points of view will be discussed in detail. On the one hand, the ultimate goal of the human being is to prepare
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life for all individuals. Technology and modern business are the most valuable
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to reach
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purpose.
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,
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goal only could be
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by sharing new scientific methods freely.
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, in my master's study, I and my supervisor worked on a method for robot trajectory tracking, developed by a Chinese researcher.
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, our conducted
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us to reach a 20 per cent improvement in his method.
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improvement could happen only because of the free sharing of scientific information.
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, we know all new
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have high value in the academic environment.
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, The cost of these works is one of the most important reasons that individuals conduct new research and develop new methods.
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, in the scientific world, articles are published in
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.
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, these
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sell the articles to students who want to work on these papers and the main source of these
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' expenditures is made in
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way. Can you imagine a world without publishers and
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? In conclusion, new eras and new
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features made our lifestyle different, in many aspects
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as science and business. Some communities think in
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era,
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should be shared freely.
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, I believe
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way of thinking could be very destructive for our globe since the value and credit of new works would be forgotten.
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Coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clearer presentation of ideas and arguments in the introduction and conclusion.
Task achievement
Provide a more balanced view of both positions and address the prompt more directly in the introduction and conclusion.
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