The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbinton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map gives information about the floor map of a most renowned area in the town of Norbinton and changes that will take place after renovation. Before the innovations were done, after entering the entrance we will find a beautiful straight road, leading to a circle with one exit in the direction of the east. both of them are well surrounded by houses . Ahead in the north direction, we can see a breathtaking river which has no access.The spotlight of
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is it is very close to the town in the west direction. The new map shows that the circle has 3 exits, one in the east , where a new playground and school will be built at the corner,
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in the north which will have a hanging bridge connecting the colony with the river.
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, near the local gate, a new medical centre will be built. in conclusion, after doing the changes the status of the area will be greatly upgraded as newer buildings like schools, playground and medical centre,
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better spacing of houses will create a great community. Access to the river will prevent any water problems.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • site
  • current
  • proposed
  • expand
  • facilities
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • roads
  • business park
  • airport
  • size
  • layout
  • comparisons
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