Watching a live performance such as a play, concert or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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No one can deny that the fashion of attending live performances among

people

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has decreased

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the increased trend of seeking pleasure remotely .The recent coronavirus pandemic has

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ascend

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this

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trend like a catalyst . I ,

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, disagree with the notion that attending live performances

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as music concerts , games and sports event is more pleasurable than watching them on

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. Undoubtedly, live

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performances

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can be fascinating and memorable.

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, these can be costly

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the unaffordable ticket fare. The recent increase in food prices and high energy bills have shifted

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people

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's mindset to money-saving entertainment. These days public drives more enjoyment from

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rather than spending fortunes on attending live events

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the fact that they are enjoying the same event without spending

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, live performances can cater

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financers and sponsors which can result in an influx of money but it is not necessary for these events can cater majority of the population and make

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happy.

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is a complete package of free entertainment and

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can switch channels

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their choices and mood.

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, whenever my favourite cricket team does not perform well , I often switch quickly to a music channel to give myself some relaxation time which I can not do in a live cricket match. The addition of Netflix and amazon prime on

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addictive rather than watching live plays.

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is more entertaining than live performance and

people

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can always change channel

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their moods and choice.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

262 words

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Atmosphere
Immersion
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Social interaction
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High-definition visuals
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Watching a live performance such as a play, concert or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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