The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.
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time
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people in the UK spent on the telephone in three different categories from 1995 to 2002.
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, the national and international
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mobiles share the same rising pattern,
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there was a slight fluctuation in the
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UK citizens spent on the local telephone over a period from 1995 to 2002. At the beginning of the period, in 1995, the British spent 7000 billion
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calling by local-fixed line,
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the amount of
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for the national and international lines was haft of that. The mobile phone has little usage
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year, before increasing dramatically all the
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and reaching about 50 billion
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in 2002. Local calling was the most common way throughout the period and reached a peak in 1999 at 90 billion
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, at which point there was a gradual drop
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the popularity of the other 2 categories.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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