The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.
The bar chart illustrates how
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time
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people in the UK spent on the telephone in three different categories from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
, the national and international
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mobiles share the same rising pattern,
while
there was a slight fluctuation in the
time
UK citizens spent on the local telephone over a period from 1995 to 2002. At the beginning of the period, in 1995, the British spent 7000 billion
minutes
calling by local-fixed line,
while
the amount of
time
for the national and international lines was haft of that. The mobile phone has little usage
this
year, before increasing dramatically all the
time
and reaching about 50 billion
minutes
in 2002. Local calling was the most common way throughout the period and reached a peak in 1999 at 90 billion
minutes
, at which point there was a gradual drop
due to
the popularity of the other 2 categories.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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