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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explain how your firend could learn this sport Suggest that you both learn this sport together

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How do you do, I hope you feeling well. I am very glad when you asked about recommendations for new
sports
 for me. Nowadays, outdoor
sports
 are very difficult to play, and because of that,
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sports
 are dependent on weather Situations and time.
Therefore
 I would recommend you to do indoor
sports
. There are a lot of indoor
sports
 to play, but I think better and most suitable and interesting
sports
 that I recommend for you to play
badminton
. It has wider areas to learn and it can play with just one opposite player minimum for individual play, and a maximum of four players for team play, and
also
 you wouldn’t worry about the weather or you can manage your playing time with your working schedule.
This
 is the main reason to recommend
this
 sport to you.
Furthermore
, I am
also
 lately started to play
badminton
 with some friends for two days per week at Kadolkale Indoor stadium for two hours per day. In the first ,hour we practice with a professional
badminton
 instructor to gain better
badminton
 skills for us. I think
that is
 very useful for you to learn about
badminton
 well with that mentioned instructor, he has native knowledge of speaking English as well. And we can play together,
that is
 very enjoyable for us. I think you will be interested in my advice, I hope your reply as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Asanka
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