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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right or wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Teachers play a vital role in everyone's life .They are the foundation of
this
 society.They inculcate the seeds within us .We learn things majorly in our schools through teachers apart from our families.It is often argued that they should teach us
in judging
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 what is wrong and right
along with
 academics
too
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.In my opinion ,
this
 is highly suggestable since childhood time is the only time when we can learn and remember easily .
To begin
 with, in my perspective to survive in
this
 smart and intelligent world,practical knowledge of every aspect of life is equally essential
therefore
 it becomes mandatory for the crew to teach behaviour psychology to their students.
Besides
this
, juveniles spend major time in schools with faculty
therefore
 chances of learning are
more
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 at schools.
Although
 the family is
also
 a part of any individual learning through a teacher is the next level of learning.
For example
, I would allow my children to grab good things from any other source than the family so that I can see my
child
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 growing in their learning.
On the contrary
, If teachers
would be
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 limited to teaching academic subjects only,the offspring would not be able to learn other things like how to behave with others in society,how to lead a successful life etc.Our upcoming generation would not
be having
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 any other knowledge other than traditional subjects,which is immensely important for sustaining
this
 globe.
To conclude
this
 ,I would strongly recommend that the cadre should
allow teaching
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 various
other
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topics
too
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other than academic subjects so the world can have a bright future with a knowledgeful society .
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task response
The essay addresses the prompt and provides relevant supporting points, but it should include a more balanced discussion of both viewpoints. It is important to clearly present both perspectives and give equal attention to each of them, followed by the author's opinion.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a basic logical structure with an introduction and a conclusion. However, there are some issues with coherence, such as sentence structure and transition words. Make sure to use a variety of cohesive devices to connect ideas and create a more organized flow of information.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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