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The use of animals for experiments has increased drastically.some people believe that it is necessary to use animals for experiments while others are totally against it Discuss both views and give your opinion

#animals #experiments #people
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were
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USA
 in the given period ( 2003-2013) .
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a week and who went once or twice in a month have the higher percentage ,which
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 from 25 % to nearly 33%. in 2003,the percentage of
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individuals who
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restaurants
 begins at just under 5%for
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 every day
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 highest which is about 32%
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then
 it declined to 5 % for never eat at
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 peak at almost 33% to went
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 to its lowest at slightly under 5 which is the same percentage for 2013 for never
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2006 and 2013 have the same numbers
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whereas
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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