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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about ths?

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It is commonly believed that an organized and clean place helps people manage their
time
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 more efficiently, but there
is
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a
counter argument
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exists
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 as well that it may
results
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 in
over consciousness
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,
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 mental health.
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, I would support the first view and discuss both views in
this
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 essay. On one hand, a well-managed workplace helps someone with
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time
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 management. A person may avoid
time
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 wasters when he finds things easily when needed,
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, the human brain works more peacefully and
effeciently
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efficiently
 when there is no mess around,
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, anxiety is reduced.
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, A professor of an
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American
 university
,
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 published his
researsch
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research
 work in which he demonstrated that a mess gives
negative
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 signal to the human brain and produces anxiety, in response to which it comes in the state to combat pressure and,
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,
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 focus towards other activities. On other hand, it's commonly observed that being too
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desciplined
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disciplined
discipline
 makes a person
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, which disturbs hormones.
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, his body feels
tensed
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 and unrest.
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 mental and physical health, and productivity for the reason that he is giving
his
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more
time
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 in managing
the
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things in order and is unable to achieve desired goals effectively.
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, my aunt went into
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 state of depression, as she was mad about cleaning the home. Doctors suggested
her
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to
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fight
with
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this
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 habit and give herself some
time
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 to relax by ignoring the litter around. After 4 months of therapy, she came out of
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 by
practicing
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the
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peace in the disorganized living place.
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, tidy living and workplaces are good as it saves
time
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 and gives peace to the mind
,
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 but may become dangerous when
a
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perfection is tried to achieve because it consumes too much energy. A little ignorance
are
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 good to counter the damage.

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