Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion about ths?
It is commonly believed that an organized and clean place helps people manage their
time
more efficiently, but there is
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counter argument
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counter-argument
exists
as well that it may Correct pronoun usage
that exists
results
in Change the verb form
result
over consciousness
, Add a hyphen
over-consciousness
thus
, may effect
mental health. Correct your spelling
affect
However
, I would support the first view and discuss both views in this
essay.
On one hand, a well-managed workplace helps someone with the
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time
management. A person may avoid time
wasters when he finds things easily when needed, also
, the human brain works more peacefully and effeciently
when there is no mess around, Correct your spelling
efficiently
therefore
, anxiety is reduced. For example
, A professor of an Amercian
universityCorrect your spelling
American
,
published his Remove the comma
apply
researsch
work in which he demonstrated that a mess gives Correct your spelling
research
negative
signal to the human brain and produces anxiety, in response to which it comes in the state to combat pressure and, Add an article
a negative
thus
, lose
focus towards other activities.
On other hand, it's commonly observed that being too Correct subject-verb agreement
loses
much
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desciplined
makes a person Correct your spelling
disciplined
discipline
over conscious
, which disturbs hormones. Add a hyphen
over-conscious
Hence
, his body feels tensed
and unrest. Replace the word
tense
This
unrest condition of the body may effect
mental and physical health, and productivity for the reason that he is giving Correct your spelling
affect
his
more Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
in managing the
things in order and is unable to achieve desired goals effectively. Correct article usage
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For instance
, my aunt went into the
state of depression, as she was mad about cleaning the home. Doctors suggested Correct article usage
a
her
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she
to
fight Fix the infinitive
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with
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this
habit and give herself some time
to relax by ignoring the litter around. After 4 months of therapy, she came out of this
by practicing
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practising
the
peace in the disorganized living place.
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To conclude
, tidy living and workplaces are good as it saves time
and gives peace to the mind,
but may become dangerous when Remove the comma
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a
perfection is tried to achieve because it consumes too much energy. A little ignorance Remove the article
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are
good to counter the damage.Change the verb form
is
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