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You have seen an advertisment in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look aftertheir six year old child Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to your advertisement in the magazine for the position of
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nanny. I am very much interested to take
this
 role as I am eagerly looking for something similar. I really hope that you will consider my application. I have been
baby-sitting
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since
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last
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 5 years. My
last
 job was with
Mr.
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 Smith’s family until they moved to another country for good. My job role included picking
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 dropping
their
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5 year old
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 son
along with
 preparing food and feeding him.
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 I
also
 helped the child with
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 daily school lessons. They can
also
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 if required. Other than taking care of the baby, I plan to continue
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 courses
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 I have enrolled. The course consists of recorded classes so the timings won’t be an issue here. We can mutually decide and I will take those sessions
accordingly
. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Kiran
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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