You have seen an advertisment in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look aftertheir six year old child Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to your advertisement in the magazine for the position of

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apply

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nanny. I am very much interested to take

this

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role as I am eagerly looking for something similar. I really hope that you will consider my application. I have been

baby-sitting

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babysitting

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since

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for

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last

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the last

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5 years. My

last

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job was with

Mr.

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Smith’s family until they moved to another country for good. My job role included picking

and

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up and

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dropping

their

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off their

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5 year old

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son

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preparing food and feeding him.

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this

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also

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helped the child with

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this

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these

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daily school lessons. They can

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provide a reference

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if required. Other than taking care of the baby, I plan to continue

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courses

which

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I have enrolled. The course consists of recorded classes so the timings won’t be an issue here. We can mutually decide and I will take those sessions

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. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Kiran

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

162 words

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The Greeting

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