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Films were produced by big companies in the past, but today people are able to make a film. Do you think this trend is positive or negative?

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 many years ago,
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 were only made by big organizations,
people
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 could create
films
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 by themselves at the moment.
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 there are some drawbacks
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 a
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 trend nowadays, I think it has more beneficial sides that can facilitate the making-film industry in today’s world. On the one hand,
people
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 making a film is accomplished by lots of negative effects on society.
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, a big amount of
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 are released without censoring carefully by the authorities.
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 phenomena will bring incorrect awareness of some problems in society to viewers who lack the experience and knowledge to evaluate these problems.
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, some bad men will take advantage of making
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 to transmit the worst messages. In modern life, it is easy to witness an argument among lots of
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 on social media because of a film, but a few
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 can realize the bad purpose of the author through
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 film.
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, there is a diverse range of compelling reasons why
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 produce
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 rather than only big companies are more positive. Topics of
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 nowadays become abundant, creative, dramatic, and vivid, which are exclusively designed for each kind of movie
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 of using one structure for the mass of one as in the past.
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 innovation makes
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 become attractive and viewers
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 pay more attention to
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.
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, the content of
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 will be demonstrated closer to the daily life of
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.
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 improvement will help
people
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 have a wider look at the results of bad and good
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 practically through
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, so they will have a better attitude toward society.
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, I believe that
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 produced by lots of
people
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 bring beneficial sides as long as we are able to overcome the difficulties at the first period.
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