The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
This
line graph depicts the ratio of unemployed people in two countries the United States
and Japan from 1993 to 1999
it is clear from the graph that there was a contradiction in the rates between the two nations
according to
what is shown united states
had seven per cent of their workforce unemployed at the beginning of March 1993
then
the unemployment rate in the United States
began declining sharply since March 1993 and reached the 5.5% mark in the
middle of 1995 when it remained roughly the same for one more year
after ,that the percentage of the unemployed workforce in the United States
dropped slightly to about 4% at the end
of the period
meanwhile, the percentage of the unemployed workforce in Japan grew gradually from 2.2 per cent to 3.5 per cent in the first three years whereas
it fluctuated for the next two at about the same figure
by the end of ,1999 the unemployment rate in Japan reached its peak at 4.5% which was a larger proportion than the USSubmitted by t0t0878 on
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