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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sum of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving exisitng public transport.

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Although
 some
people
 believe that it is important to spend a lot of
money
 on constructing new railway lines for fast trains between cities, others strongly argue that
money
 should be spent on improving existing public transport. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both the above-mentioned views and will present my own opinion. On the one hand,
according to
 some
people
 , should only spend a large sum
of
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on constructing advanced railway lines for very quick trains between cities. Since the urban sprawl is on a spectacular rise it would be
acceptable
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 outcome if governments spend
money
 on novel projects relating to railways.
This
 initiative will prove beneficial for
people
 living in urban centres to reach their desired homes in time.
Therefore
, spending on railway lines will result in convenience for the general populace.
On the other
hand
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 those who think that
people
 should spend capital on already established infrastructure relating to public transit will have some productive consequences. When a government takes an initiative regarding the development of new means of travelling, it requires a lot of manpower and investments.
Nevertheless
, at the same time, it can utilise those workers and
money
 to ameliorate the constituted public transit.
For example
, they can invest in transforming established public transport into a high-capacity transportation system. That would surely cope with the burgeoning population in the cities.
Hence
, investments in the existing transportation system will not prove futile. In a nutshell, even though there are benefits of streamlining trains in an urban centre which is now crowded to a great extent, I inferred that it requires a great deal of capital, manpower, skilled personnel and heavy machinery. So, it would be more auspicious if a government plans to restrengthen the public transport which is already in use. After a thorough analysis of
this
 subject, it is predicted that governments will prefer to invest more
money
 in the already-established rail infrastructure.
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