The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The provided graphs show the
reasons
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that contributed to the decreased productivity of agricultural
lands
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and
also
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depicts
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the land degradation percentage in three regions.
According to
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the pie chart, over-grazing and deforestation are
two
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the two
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main
reasons
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for land’s degradation in productivity and they both caused more than 30% degradation of
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lands
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land
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each.
Over cultivation
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Over-cultivation
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is another prominent
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reasons
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for
less
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the less
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productive
of
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apply
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agricultural
lands
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and it contributed
28
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% of the total causes of barren
lands
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. All other
reasons
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contributed 7% as the causes for barren
lands
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.
According to
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the table data, North American
lands
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became less productive by 5% and
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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and
over grazing
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over-grazing
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were
two
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the two
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most significant
reasons
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for
this
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. European farming
lands
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’ fertility got decreased by 23% which was quite high compared to North America and deforestation was the main reason for that. South Pacific Oceania region
also
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faced
a
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13% less productivity in their farming
lands
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and over-grazing was the main reason for that.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, lands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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