The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
The provided graphs show the
reasons
that contributed to the decreased productivity of agricultural lands
and also
depicts
the land degradation percentage in three regions.
Correct subject-verb agreement
depict
According to
the pie chart, over-grazing and deforestation are two
main Correct article usage
the two
reasons
for land’s degradation in productivity and they both caused more than 30% degradation of lands
each. Fix the agreement mistake
land
Over cultivation
is another prominent Add a hyphen
Over-cultivation
reasons
for Replace the adjective
reason
less
productive Correct article usage
the less
of
agricultural Change preposition
apply
lands
and it contributed 28
% of the total causes of barren Change preposition
to 28
lands
. All other reasons
contributed 7% as the causes for barren lands
.
According to
the table data, North American lands
became less productive by 5% and over cultivation
and Add a hyphen
over-cultivation
over grazing
were Add a hyphen
over-grazing
two
most significant Correct article usage
the two
reasons
for this
. European farming lands
’ fertility got decreased by 23% which was quite high compared to North America and deforestation was the main reason for that. South Pacific Oceania region also
faced a
13% less productivity in their farming Correct article usage
apply
lands
and over-grazing was the main reason for that.Submitted by marzieh.kiani on
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