The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store

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The line graph illustrates information about how much money per customer spent on rugby, tennis, football and swimming equipment in one unspecified sports store in Canada. The units were measured in dollars for a 2-decade period starting from 2000.

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it is clear that

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average spending on swimming and football tools increased over the period shown.

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costumers

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started allocating less money to equipment for rugby and tennis. When the period began,

costumers

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used to spend $60 on buying the necessary stuff for football. Despite a sharp decline to $40 in the following decade,

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figure went up exponentially to reach a peak of approximately $70 and become dominant in the group in 2020.

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, the same data for swimming experienced an uptake from its initial around $10 to the final 30. In stark contrast,

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the

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average spending on rugby equipment rose by $20 from $40 between 2000 and 2010, it halved till the final year. The same figure for tennis tools

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decreased from $30-2000 to $10-2020, showing the least amount.

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The chart below shows the average money spent per costumer on various types of equipment in a Canadian sports store

This is a part of a letter your receive from an English pen friend. Don't forget to tell me about the area you live in and what you and your friends do in your free time. Write a letter to your pen friend. Write your letter in about 100 words.

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Some people claim that there should be some fixed guide lines in how to deal or implement changes in an organization, whereas others believe in other approaches to perform these changes. Discuss both of these views and state your own opinion.

You participated in a public event organized at a local park. Write a letter to the event organizer. In your letter tell them some feedback about the event; explain what you particularly enjoyed; give some suggestions for improvement.