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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without any payment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books #payment
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people have some consideration about paper books and newspapers will not be purchased because of
e-books
 and papers.
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 and papers are easy to get and can
read
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be read
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free
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for free
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.
However
, in my opinion,there are some
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large
 and
disagreement
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disagreements
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wich
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which
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 will be delighted in the paragraph. First of all, I must say that
,
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e-books
 and paper are more fruitful than
paper
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the paper
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book
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books
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 as
it
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they
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 can save
one
's valuable time.
Any
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Anyone
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one
 can read papers from
any where
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, they do not need to go
library
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the library
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 or any other public places.
Moreover
,
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the e-book
an e-book
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e-book
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e-books
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 can carry millions of articles which are free to read.
On the contrary
hand books
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handbooks
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 must be carried
on
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place
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a place
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 to another which is annoying.
For instance
, whenever I try to find out
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the
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 meaning of
word
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a word
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 or any important
artical
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article
, I do not have to search in the dictionary, just
one
 press is enough.
Hence
, I must reckon that
e-book
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e-books
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 is well becoming for
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the mordern
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mordern
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modern
 world.
On the other hand
, though
e-books
 have various
kind
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kinds
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 of advantages
but
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it has some drawbacks
also
. It might be affected on
eyes
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the eyes
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 because of
high
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the high
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 lighting system of gadgets.It may vital reason for eye diseases.
Also
, in
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the onlile
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onlile
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online
portal
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,portal
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 various kinds of people
wite
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with
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 so many things and their opinion might not be
same
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the same
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as a result
one
 can not take
right
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the right
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 decision
in
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 a particular subject.
Finally
,
e-books
 and newspapers r
the
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apply
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mordern
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modern
 invention in nowadays, It is a
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 system and easy to use,
nonetheless
, I do not fully agree or disagree about them.
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