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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buidings.This money should be spent on building modern building instead.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buidings #money
In
this
 fast-paced society, maintenance of old buildings is considered an impractical option by most people as it requires a lot of money, time and energy which can rather be spent on the
construction
 of new buildings.
Although
, it is a good concept I disagree with it.
Firstly
, it has many environmental consequences.
For example
, the old building should be demolished before the start of the
construction
 of a new building.
by
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 the demolition of old structures, lots of pollution and waste are created. pollution will
also
 increase when a new building gets built.
Secondly
, there are other factors like
construction
 cost, material cost and etc. which
adds
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 up to be more than the maintenance cost of an old building. and
lastly
, there is the convenience factor, as it not convenient for people to build new apartments
beacuse
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because
 it requires
that
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old homeowners to move to a different place and
also
 a lot of time and patience is needed for the
construction
 of a building. In conclusion, people are free to invest their money
however
 they want, but in my
opinion
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 it's not a feasible option to construct a new building in the place of an old building until and unless
if
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it is absolutely necessary.
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