The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
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The picture below describes the process in which
sugar
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is manufactured from
sugar
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cane.
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, the production of
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from
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canes
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needs a total of seven steps. It
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with farming
sugar
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canes
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and finishes with
sugar
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.
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the first
step
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,
sugar
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canes
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cane
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are planted and cared
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12 to 18 months, and the stalks are
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harvested. The harvesting process can be done in two ways: using machines or using human powers. Following that, a
crushers
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which
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huge rollers
presses
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sugar
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cane
juice
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out of the stalks, and after that,
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juice
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is refined by a limestone filter in the purifying
juice
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step
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.
The next
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step
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is
evaporator
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the evaporator
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, which
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another name
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juice
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becomes syrup, in
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step
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juice
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is boiled under fire to form
syrup
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a syrup
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. The sixth
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of
this
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process is
centrifuge
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, the syrup
are
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spun in the centrifuge to remove liquid and produce
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crystals.
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, the
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is dried and cooled,
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packed and sold in many places.
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