The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The picture below describes the process in which
sugar
is manufactured from sugar
cane.
Overall
, the production of sugar
from sugar
canes
needs a total of seven steps. It Fix the agreement mistake
cane
begin
with farming Change the verb form
begins
sugar
canes
and finishes with Fix the agreement mistake
cane
sugar
.
At
the first Change preposition
In
step
, sugar
canes
are planted and cared Fix the agreement mistake
cane
from
12 to 18 months, and the stalks are Change preposition
for from
then
harvested. The harvesting process can be done in two ways: using machines or using human powers. Following that, a crushers
which Correct the article-noun agreement
crusher
has
huge rollers Change the verb form
have
presses
Change the verb form
press
sugar
cane juice
out of the stalks, and after that, this
juice
is refined by a limestone filter in the purifying juice
step
.
The next
step
is evaporator
, which Add an article
the evaporator
an evaporator
have
another name Change the verb form
has
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
juice
becomes syrup, in this
step
juice
is boiled under fire to form syrup
. The sixth Add an article
a syrup
step
of this
process is centrifuge
, the syrup Add an article
a centrifuge
are
spun in the centrifuge to remove liquid and produce Change the verb form
is
sugar
crystals. Finally
, the sugar
is dried and cooled, then
packed and sold in many places.Submitted by andyvinhtran1212 on
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