Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some people believe that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other
celebrations
is just a
waste
of
money
, others suppose that these are necessary for individuals and
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society. in
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I will argue both opinions and after
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I will inform my own opinion. on the one
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some people are sure that spending
money
on
celebrations
is a
waste
of
money
, they reckon that they can spend that
money
on something which is more important.
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I find that it indeed is a
waste
of
money
, I will have fun one day and the other day I will forget everything, and my
money
will not be returned to me, as far as I am able to judge I can spend that
money
on something that I adore,
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I can purchase me books or clothes or anything that I like.
on the other
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some people suppose that without
celebrations
our life would be monotonous. they are sure that we should have fun and we should celebrate
celebrations
, they suppose that there you can meet your friends and relatives, communicate with them and have
such
a good time
moreover
you can make new friends.
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celebrating
celebrations
can be helpful for waiters, as they will earn
money
,
also
it can be a spectacular opportunity for small businesses. in conclusion, without question having fun, making new friends is a great opportunity,
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as far as I am able to judge
majority
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the majority
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of
celebrations
is just a
waste
of
money
.
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  • extravagant
  • frivolous
  • lavish
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • consumerism
  • unrealistic
  • social bonds
  • milestones
  • local businesses
  • celebrate
  • memorable
  • nostalgic
  • cherish
  • community
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