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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided maps illustrate an
island
 as it was previously and after modifications for the purpose of tourism.
Overall
, the major changes
includes
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include
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 a new reception and a restaurant, new footpaths and vehicle tracks which
facilitates
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facilitate
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 people and vehicle movements and accommodation areas. The biggest
changes
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change
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 to
this
island
is
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are
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 introducing new accommodation buildings
as
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for
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 two groups, which can accommodate a larger number of tourists. These accommodations are placed
in
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on
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 the right and the centre of the
island
.
In addition
 to that, a brand new restaurant has opened
in
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on
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 the top side of the
island
, to facilitate all the visitors with
foods
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food
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 and beverages.
Furthermore
,
reception
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the reception
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 was built to welcome tourists to the
island
.
Moreover
, a large pier has
built
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 to support all the yachts and boats
in
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on
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 the bottom side of the
island
.
Also
, a swimming area was introduced
in
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on
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 the left side of the
island
 for
the
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apply
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entertaining
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entertainment
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 purposes.
Finally
, no changes have been made to the trees
in
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on
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 the
island
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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