The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme

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The following table highlights data, about an average individual from five different European countries and their monthly earning expenditures on things like foodstuff, housing, clothing and entertainment.

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, it is visible that Food and drink and housing are the main priorities for citizens, figures for these items indicate over 20% almost in every country but Spain,

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clothing and entertainment were far less important to them, interestingly the highest number reached 19% in Germany which stands for entertainments.

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France, the highest number for housing drew up 31% and the least for clothing with only 7%

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Germany for the same expenses made up 33% and 15% respectively. The UK had spent the most on the housing 37% but clothing

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entertainment were not equal to food and drink 22% and 27% in turn Figures for Turkey and Spain did not have a considerable difference, with only 4-5% but

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both countries outlay most of their income on Food and drink 36 and 31%

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Turkey entertains less and Spain buys less clothing

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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme

Some animal species are now completely extinct. Many people believe that we should prevent this from happening in the future. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is sad that life is becoming increasingly stressful for most people. What is the reason of this phenomenon and how could this problem be solved?

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar ,which causes many health problems .Sugary products shoud be mad more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar . do you agree or disagree ?

Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in theirexams should be rewarded. Others say that those who show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.