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Society would benefit from a complete ban on all forms of advertisement. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 are immensely necessary to market a company's product and profile, discontinuing different mediums of
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 will not be advantageous to society,
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, it will have a more adverse effect. I strongly disagree that a ban on all forms of
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 will be beneficial to civilisation on the whole, mainly because without marketing society will not be aware of the various products that are available in the market.
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, in recent times digital marketing on platforms like Instagram has risen significantly, mainly because the algorithm learns the need of the user by accessing their online search history and
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 targets a specific group of people for a product. In case that was barred the people who would have benefitted from the product will be at a disadvantage as the thing would have made their life easier.
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, if
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 were not allowed, be it any media, there will be a significant loss of jobs which would result in the plunging of the economy and an increase in support packages for those who have lost their livelihood.
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, the amount of manpower that goes into making
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 is significant, there are cameramen, lighting designers, makeup artists, graphic designers, set designers and many other
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 professionals. If all the mediums of promotion were to be discontinued, people like them will become unemployed and
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 lose their wages. Since their skills will become obsolete they will need to be supported by the taxpayers till they find a relevant skill again.
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, resulting in an increase in the taxes on the hard-working employee.
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, I firmly disagree that barring all forms of
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 will yield any benefits to human society,
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, it will decrease the awareness of different products in the market and increase the rate of unemployment and unnecessary skills
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