the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits
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The chart illustrates the evaluation of the survey about how often people consume and purchase
coffee
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and tea in five different cities in Australia.
Overall
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,
according to
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the survey, the majority population in Australia prefer to drink
coffee
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or tea at a cafe ,particularly people who live in Melbourne.
Moreover
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, the city that experienced the greatest and the least proportion in the
overall
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evaluation is Hobert and Adelaide respectively. In the
last
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four weeks, going to a shop
for
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to
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grab a beverage
seem
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seems
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to be the most popular in Australia ,especially in Melbourne
approximately
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at approximately
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68% and in Hobart
nearly
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at nearly
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65%. Meanwhile, Buying instant
coffee
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is ranked as the second most popular, Hobart city accounted for the highest with almost 55% followed by Brisbane and Adelaide which were approximately 52% and 50% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the least favourite habit in every city is buying fresh
coffee
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, Sydney experienced the largest portion which was around 44%, nearly 42% in Melbourne and hit the floor less than 35% in Brisbane.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • percentage
  • frequency
  • preference
  • health benefits
  • caffeine content
  • cultural significance
  • consumption
  • trends
  • venues
  • social aspects
  • beverage
  • shift
  • influence
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • discussion
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