At the present time, populations of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Some research studies revealed that most
of
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apply
countries
found the population of Add an article
the countries
over aged
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over-aged
people
comparatively less than the younger generation. From past
20 years onwards, Correct article usage
the past
people
were dying earlier even though life
span of Add an article
the life
human
Add an article
a human
the human
being
is having Fix the agreement mistake
beings
atleast
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at least
hundred
years.
Correct article usage
a hundred
Few
merits and demerits of Correct article usage
A few
situation
Add an article
the situation
has
been explained in the upcoming paragraphs.
Presently, the activation mode has Change the verb form
have
been
declined as Unnecessary verb
apply
people
getting
Wrong verb form
get
an
older because Change the article
apply
todays
Change to a genitive case
today's
life style
Correct your spelling
lifestyle
making
them Wrong verb form
makes
more sick
. Some studies done by doctors Replace the words
sicker
claims
as the generation Correct subject-verb agreement
claim
moving
forward most to older Wrong verb form
moves
age
at high rates. Therefore
, by early
period around 60 years were going to see their death. Correct article usage
the early
People
living in cities having
Wrong verb form
have
lot
of junk food, Change the article
a lot
heavy
traffic followed by dust Correct word choice
and heavy
on
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apply
every
time which leads to Correct determiner usage
the
Add an article
a problem
the problem
problem
in health. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
Hence
, by
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from
young
stage onwards Correct article usage
a young
people
need to depend on medicines and hospital life
till death. Thereby, due to
heavy schedulde
in Correct your spelling
schedule
work
their children might not take care Add a comma
,work
properly
. Change preposition
of properly
Hence
of
having numerous Change preposition
apply
medication
Fix the agreement mistake
medications
better
to live at very shorter Add a missing verb
is better
life
span.
On Correct article usage
the other
other hand
, most Change the wording
another hand
other hands
of
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apply
the
countries Correct article usage
apply
able
to control their world population and Add a missing verb
are able
also
unemployment. In most of
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apply
the
private Correct article usage
apply
organisation
, even after retirement Fix the agreement mistake
organisations
age
still old age
people
working in higher
Add an article
a higher
position
not providing Fix the agreement mistake
positions
chance
to adults. One more advantage Add an article
a chance
the chance
according to
population is government
could find budget less in case of fuel Add an article
the government
source
, water, food and other requirements for common Fix the agreement mistake
sources
people
. Responsible administrative departments can limit the supply of need
things on the basis of Wrong verb form
needed
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
people
in the house. Thus
, it is found useful when middle age
individual is more compared to overaged pupils.
In conclusion, having less life
span found
more advantageous than Add a missing verb
was found
Add an article
a disadvantage
disadvantage
. It may give more opportunities to adolescents in most of Replace the word
disadvantageous
the
every field and huge benefits found for Remove the article
apply
government
Correct article usage
the government
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