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Unemployment is one of the biggest problems of contemporary society. What do you think are the main causes of unemployment? What solutions can you suggest?

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Currently,
unemployment
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 is one of the most relevant problems that modern society has to face.
This
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 situation is caused by the immigration that exists in the countries and
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 the
overpopulation
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 that coexists in crowded
cities
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. There are several solutions to face
this
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 problem, but the most important ones could be the control of available vacancies by the government, and relocating unemployed
people
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 to other non-crowded
cities
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 in order to distribute the existing jobs. Nowadays, the rates of immigration have increased
due to
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 several circumstances, giving in a result an increase in
unemployment
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. The population who immigrates searching for a better quality of life and better
job
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 conditions raise the population in the
country
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 where they arrive, increasing the demand for jobs but with the same number of offers.
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, if an immigrant family arrives in a
country
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 looking for a new
job
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, there will be more demand for that position.
This
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 issue could be solved if the government set up control over the vacancies, allowing only the number of
people
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 that will find a
job
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 when they start living in that
country
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. The second reason for
unemployment
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 is the existence of
overpopulation
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.
Overpopulation
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 causes the majority of
people
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require
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to require
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 to live in the biggest
cities
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 of the world, resulting in a decrease in the offers.
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, in capital
cities
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,
such
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 as Madrid, the rates of
unemployment
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 are higher than in other non-overpopulated
cities
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,
such
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 as Málaga. A way to solve
this
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 issue could be to relocate
people
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 and send them to different
cities
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 where they could find a
job
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, rather than compete among 5 million
people
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 who live in the capital of the
country
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.
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, I believe that immigration and
overpopulation
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 are the two main causes of
unemployment
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 and that control over the available vacancies and the relocation of
people
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 could be two considerable solutions to face
this
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 problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological displacement
  • Automation
  • Economic restructuring
  • Outsourcing
  • Global competitiveness
  • Skills gap
  • Workforce downsizing
  • Labor market
  • Job creation strategies
  • Retraining programs
  • Economic stimulus
  • Entrepreneurial initiatives
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